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【雅思培训】朗阁教师教你避免雅思写作失分点

来源:朗阁教育 2012-06-20 编辑:PMC_ivy 雅思托福0元试学

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      在考生们在备考雅思写作时,笔者认为只要能够认识到自己的弱点,就能够使自己的写作有所改善和*升。在本文中,朗阁海外考试研究中心的将通过分析目前雅思考生的作文,归纳出雅思写作的三大失分点。

失分点一:图表作文中缺乏对比

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

从上述图表作文的考题要求中,我们看到考官要求考生在写图表时要注意comparisons(对比)。当然,对比并不是针对图表中任一数据进行对比,而是针对图表的主要特征来进行对比。

举例:

As is shown from the chart, a vast majority of top decision-makers (92%) regard the member of the European Union as good while less than a half of general public (48%) think it good. That’s to say that satisfactory degree among top decision-makers is twice as much as in general public. (3) In addition, 28% general public comment European Union’s member on neither good nor bad; only a few portion of top decision-makers (4%) look it upon. The attitude towards not know and bad in general public make up nearly a quarter (15% and 9% respectively). This number is almost 3 times more than in top decision-makers (2% each).

解析:

从以上的这个段落里,我们可以看到红色部分的字体都是在针对图表中的重要数值进行对比。在此段的句中,前面的vast majority和后面的a half of … 通过一个表示转折对比的连接词whileless than连接起来,这个比较级的运用可以使考官非常明确的看到decision makersgeneral public之间的数值差异。其次,在本段中,倍数关系的使用也让考官非常清晰的看到了图表中的重要数据及部分信息的重要性。而这一点,恰恰是*考生使用*弱的一个语法知识点。因此,朗阁海外考试研究中心的建议考生在图表作文写作中,当遇到明显的数值差异时,要通过以上*到的词汇和句型针对图表中的重要数据进行有效地对比。

失分点二:句子使用不灵活

朗阁海外考试研究中心的建议考生在句子的使用方面要多练习,多推敲。平时在练习写作时,每每写完一篇文章,考生要推敲文中的句型——看看所使用的句型是否恰当准确。

举例:

原句: It is beneficial either for parents or for children to communicate with the teachers by exchanging information and experiences.

改为:Parents should communicate with teachers to exchange information and experiences, which can benefit their children.

解析:

这句话是笔者在批改学生作文时*具代表性的一个句子。在学生写的原句中,我们并未发现什么错误,但是我们在读这个句子时会感到并未突出和强调作者的意图——对孩子有益。但在第二句中,*后定语从句的使用突出了是children受益于家长和老师的沟通和交流。因此,考生们要明白,句子结构的恰当使用对于句子意义的表达有很大的帮助。

失分点三:逻辑关系不通顺

逻辑关系不通顺主要表现在连接词使用不准确、前后语义不清,甚至是句子的语义偏离主题等。要攻克这个弱点,朗阁海外考试研究中心的建议考生们平时多练习,多看一些范文和英语文章。

举例1

Also, there are many successful people living in big cities who can teach me a lot about how to live in a competitive society and gain success, like Bill Gates.

翻译:像比尔盖茨这样住在城市里的成功人士可以教我如何生活在这个充满竞争的社会里并取得成功。

解析:

这句话来自于论述living in a big city里谈到的住在城市里的优势。但我们仔细一看,比尔盖茨可以直接来教我们吗?事实上,这位考生想要表达的意思是城市里的教育要远比乡镇好——有很多学习和交流的平台。

举例2

再看下面这个段落:

The biggest and most obvious benefit is its contribution to the local economy. Travelling abroad means tourists must spend more money on local transportation, accommodation, and food etc. And the services to the traveller are always expansive. 这句话在这儿和前后的逻辑关系是什么呢? Once the industry becomes bigger, it gives more employment opportunities to local people and also increases the government revenue.

解析:

读完这个段落,我们不难发现文中划横线的句子与主题没有什么紧密的关系,并且与前一句也不存在并列关系。

举例3

Secondly, more knowledge and skills can improve their personal value, 前后两个句子之间缺乏有效的连接成分this can help them become much more competitive than before and make them find the job easier than the people who are lack of knowledge. In addition, people in the university can gain more social experience before they enter the society. In order to be admitted by the society, they may take part in some volunteer work and take part in the clubs or some special supporting class to earn more social experience. In conclusion, there are still many benefits for entering the university before going to the society.

解析:

在此段中,句话和第二句话之间没有连接成分。在这里,我们可以简单地把逗号改成句号,然后this首字母大写就可以了。

以上是朗阁海外考试研究中心的总结的年度雅思考生在写作中的三大失分点。希望考生们在备考雅思写作时能够加以重视,不断练习,完成一篇*的作文!


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