2019年托福改革后, 新版<Official Guide 官方指南>(简称: OG) 在老师们地千呼万唤中终于出来了...
不过,因为增加了2套官方样题,也增加了2套范文。今天老师就把其中的一套独立写作范文分享给大家。
Do you disagree or disagree with the statement:
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
“This essay earns a high score. It does an excellent job in terms of topic development and organization.” 这篇文章得了高分。它在文段展开和结构方面做的非常优秀。这道题是一个包含对比的现象题型。作者找了3个对比点,从“影响的领域”“在一起的时间” 和“心理倾向”,在每一段就进行了"老师"和"朋友"的对比。
In my opinion, students are more influenced by their friends rather than their teachers. Therefore, I disagree with the statement 'Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends'.
只是很简单,很直接地陈述作者自己的观点。并不影响得分。符合老师在写作团里强调的,“开头段,不求有功但求无过” 一样。所以,为写开头段苦恼的同学,完全可以模仿这种写法。
(让步) I do not disagree with the fact that students get influenced by their teachers. (转折) However, I believe that this 'influence' is mostly within the field of academics. .....However, with friends, students often tend to discuss a variety of topics, such as studies, friends, relationships, and families.先承认,学生确实会被老师影响。但是,主要是在”academics“ 学术领域。简单展开后,和朋友对比。在此之外,学生们更愿意跟朋友谈论更多样的话题。 The amount of time spent with the teacher or friend, also effect on how much influence has been made to a person.... However, students spend or communicate with their friends not only in school but even outside the school campus and school hours.第2个比较点,学生跟老师交流的时间有限。但是跟朋友们不仅在校内,也会在校外交流。 Also, it is normal that the students feel psychologically more attached to the people in their age group, especially with their friends....第3个对比点. 因为年龄的差距,跟老师有代沟"there is a distance.."。但是跟朋友,就没有这样的差距,所以学生在心里上就更愿意跟朋友讨论。
For these reasons, I believe that students are more influenced by their friends than by their teachers.