今天小编要和各位同学讲解的是雅思写作极易失分的陷阱题,想要了解的同学可以参考一下小编带来的这些内容哦!
那么,如何避免离题的情况出现呢?
1. 论点包含所有关键词
2. 段末加一句话回扣到题目
比如:
In most countries, prison is the most common solution for the problem of crime. However, the more effective solution is to provide people with better education so that they do not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?(20180303)
不够切题的论点 1:建造和维护监狱比较贵
修改建议:直接删掉
不够切题的论点 2:在监狱里面再教育更好
修改建议:监狱里面,通常很难真正改变一个人。二次犯罪率在很多国家都很高。并且把罪犯关在一起,增加他们彼此接触,可能加深他们的邪念。于此相比,事前教育,彻底让他们认清犯罪的后果,正确分辨是非,才能根治犯罪。
不够切题的论点 3:提供足够的就业机会可以减少人们犯罪动机
修改建议:通过教育,提升人们的就业技能,更容易找到工作,稳定收入来源,从而不犯罪。如果仅仅关监狱,那些没有能力的人,刑满后,通常会选择二次犯罪。
上面的修改版本,我的论点都是有明显的两者对比,教育的优点,是站在监狱的缺点上的,并不是孤立存在。
如果是反驳题目的论述,切题的观点是:
1. 不是所有的犯罪都是因为上面的原因,很多人也因为嫉妒仇恨等犯罪,这种人仅仅教育是不够的;
2. 还有些人为了刺激,知法犯法,只有关监狱的刑法,才足够严厉,产生极强的震慑效果。
把上面的第 2 个不够切题的论点进行英文示范:
It would be more beneficial if prisoners receive education in jails. This method effectively kills the boring and repetitive jail time, and by acquiring some skills in prison, the criminals are more likely to find a decent job after release. Potentially, the recidivism rate would be controlled.
It is the legal education before any unlawful actions that can fundamentally tackle crime. This is because incarceration cannot rehabilitate the lawbreaker effectively in many countries, as evidenced by the high recidivism rate globally. Besides, locking up all social evils in the same place facilitates communication among them, contributing to the reinforcement of their antisocial instincts. In comparison, if they are fully aware of the consequence of their behaviors and have a clear and correct understanding of what actions are socially and legally acceptable, they would be much less likely to go astray.
又比如:
New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?(20190214)
不够切题的论点 1:技术发展让学习效率更高
错误点:提高学习效率,不是 free time 做的事情,需要扯到课余的时间安排。
修改建议:新技术在教育中普遍运用,学生课下可能会依赖不同技术手段,继续学习和与同学和老师互动。所以,课余时间,不仅仅是毫无目的的玩,可能会花更多时间复习笔记,扩展知识点。这对于孩子的学术发展有好处。
不够切题的论点 2:技术发展提供了更多的娱乐方式
错误点:这个针对孩子体现的不够明显,需要更加切合到,孩子更丰富的娱乐方式,会带来的好处或者坏处。
修改建议:技术发展提供了更多的娱乐方式。孩子往往更容易沉迷于各种电脑和手机游戏。相比于之前,他们有空的时候,更多出门和小伙伴去玩耍。现在长时间面对手机和电脑屏幕,极大损伤视力,影响人际交往能力。
把上面的第 1 个不够切题的论点进行英文示范:
The advance in technology improves learning efficiency. To be more specific, teachers can use high-tech devices such as projectors or simulators in the classroom to enable better comprehension of the knowledge.
The advance in technology improves learning efficiency not only inside the classroom but more importantly outside the classroom. Students rely on computers and other portable devices to review the subject, submit coursework, and discuss academic issues with teachers and classmates effectively after school. In this way, their free time is no longer confined to aimless play in the community; instead, more chances are given for academic activities, which is definitely conducive to their improvement in scores and continuity of the learning process.
在今天描述的场景下,段末的总结句在有些时候是有必要性的。通过段末总结,强制性点题,每个论点都不跑。
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